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托福写作考试中常犯错误有哪些

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托福写作考试中常犯错误有哪些

1、不一致(Disagreements)

所谓不一致不光指主谓不一致,它还包括了数的不一致时态不一致及代词不一致等。

例1. When one have money,he can do what he want to。

(人一旦有了钱,他就能想干什么就干什么。) 剖析:one是单数第三人称,因而本句的have应改为has; 同理,want应改为wants。本句是典型的主谓不一致。

改为:Once one has money,he can do what he wants (to do)。

2、 修饰语错位(Misplaced Modifiers)

英语与汉语不同,同一个修饰语置于句子不同的位置,句子的含义可能引起变化。对于这一点中国学生往往没有引起足够的重视,因而造成了 不必要的误解。

例1. I believe I can do it well and I will better know the world outside the campus。

剖析:better位置不当,应置于句末。

3、 句子不完整(Sentence Fragments)

在口语中,交际双方可借助手势语气上下文等,不完整的句子完全可以被理解。可是书面语就不同了,句子结构不完整会令意思表达不清,这种情况常常发生在主句写完以后,笔者又想加些补充说明时发生。

例1. There are many ways to know the society. For example by TV,radio,newspaper and so on。

剖析:本句后半部分“for example by TV, radio, newspaper and so on”不是一个完整的句子,仅为一些不连贯的词语,不能独立成句。

改为:There are many ways to know society,for example,by TV,radio,and newspaper。

4、 悬垂修饰语(Dangling Modifiers)

所谓悬垂修饰语是指句首的短语与后面句子的逻辑关系混乱不清。例如:At the age of ten,my grandfather died. 这句中“at the age of ten” 只点出十岁时,但没有说明“ 谁”十岁时。按一般推理不可能是my grandfather, 如果我们把这个悬垂修饰语改明确一点,全句就不那么费解了。

改为:When I was ten,my grandfather died。

例1. To do well in college,good grades are essential。

剖析:句中不定式短语 “to do well in college” 的逻辑主语不清楚。

改为:To do well in college, a student needs good grades。

5、词性误用(Misuse of Parts of Speech)

“词性误用”常表现为:介词当动词用;形容词当副词用;名词当动词用等。

例1. None can negative the importance of money。

剖析:negative 系形容词,误作动词。

改为:None can deny the importance of money。

6、指代不清(Ambiguous Reference of Pronouns)

指代不清主要讲的是代词与被指代的人或物关系不清,或者先后所用的代词不一致。试看下面这一句:

Mary was friendly to my sister because she wanted her to be her bridesmaid。

(玛丽和我姐姐很要好,因为她要她做她的伴娘。)读完上面这一句话,读者无法明确地判断两位姑娘中谁将结婚,谁将当伴娘。如果我们把易于引起误解的代词的所指对象加以明确,意思就一目了然了。这个句子可改为:

Mary was friendly to my sister because she wanted my sister to be her bridesmaid。

例1. And we can also know the society by serving it yourself。

剖析:句中人称代词we 和反身代词yourself指代不一致。

改为:We can also know society by serving it ourselves。

7、不间断句子(Run-on Sentences)

什么叫run-on sentence?请看下面的例句。

例1. There are many ways we get to know the outside world。

剖析:这个句子包含了两层完整的意思:“There are many ways。” 以及“We get to know the outside world。”。简单地把它们连在一起就不妥当了。

改为:There are many ways for us to learn about the outside world。

或:There are many ways through which we can become acquainted with the outside world。

8、措词毛病(Troubles in Diction)

Diction 是指在特定的句子中如何适当地选用词语的问题,囿于教学时间紧迫,教师平时在这方面花的时间往往极其有限,影响了学生在写作中没有养成良好的推敲,斟酌的 习惯。他们往往随心所欲,拿来就用。所以作文中用词不当的错误比比皆是。

例1. The increasing use of chemical obstacles in agriculture also makes pollution。

(农业方面化学物质使用的不断增加也造成了污染。)剖析:显然,考生把obstacles“障碍”,“障碍物”误作substance“物质”了。另外“the increasing use (不断增加的使用)” 应改为“abusive use (滥用)”。

改为:The abusive use of chemical substances in agriculture also causes/leads to pollution。

9、累赘(Redundancy)

言以简洁为贵。写句子没有一个多余的词;写段落没有一个无必要的句子。能用单词的不用词组;能用词组的不用从句或句子。如:

In spite of the fact that he is lazy,I like him。

本句的“the fact that he is lazy”系同谓语从句,我们按照上述“能用词组的不用从句”

可以改为:In spite of his laziness,I like him。

例1. For the people who are diligent and kind, money is just the thing to be used to buy the thing they need。

剖析:整个句子可以大大简化。

改为:Diligent,caring people use money only to buy what they need。

10、 不连贯(Incoherence)

不连贯是指一个句子前言不对后语,或是结构上不畅通。这也是考生常犯的毛病。

例1. The fresh water,it is the most important things of the earth。

剖析:The fresh water 与逗号后的it 不连贯。It 与things 在数方面不一致。

改为:Fresh water is the most important thing in the world。

托福写作解析 写作中这7个语法错误要避免

1、中式英语

原:Thus, one is easier to draw bosses’ attention and gain appreciation.

改:Thus, it’s easier for you to draw bosses’ attention and gain appreciation.

评:中文习惯说“人们可以更容易地吸引老板的注意力”,而英语则习惯说“It’s easier for sb. to…”同学们要注意中英表述习惯的区别哦!

2、 用词不当

原:The absence of groupwork is a disaster for teenagers in modern society.

改:The absence of teamwork is a disaster for teenagers in modern society.

评:groupwork是“分组”或者“小组集体任务”的意思。这位同学原本想说teamwork“团队合作”,却用了一个看起来很像,但实际完全不同的词,表达出来的意思就风马牛不相及了。

原:You will be dangerous if you keep moving without a clear view of the whole picture.

改:You will be in danger if you keep moving without a clear view of the whole picture.

评:dangerous表示所修饰的对象是“带来危险的,有危险性的”,而be in danger才是“身处险境”的意思。到底谁才是威胁呢?

原:Firstly, the job, providing the opportunity for students to utilize what they learned in class, might effect their further development.

改:Firstly, the job, providing the opportunity for students to utilize what they learned in class, might affect their further development.

评:模样长得像,意思可不同了。这里想用动词affect表示“影响”,却误写为名词effect“效果”,一字千里啊!

3、搭配错误

原:Nowadays, people are crazy pursuing to be excellent.

改:Nowadays, people are crazy about excellence.

评:这位同学显然记错了be crazy about sth. 这个用法,写出来的句子自然会出问题啦。

原:Besides, public speech can effectively increase your communication skills, which facilitate your salesman career.

改:Besides, public speech can effectively improve your communication skills, which facilitate your salesman career.

评:此处是一个明显的动宾搭配错误。“提高……技巧”应该是improve the skills,而不是increase the skills.

4、词性错位

原:I will forget my sad and pressure from the work and the study.

改:I will forget my sadness and pressure from work and study.

评:sad是形容词,而这里明显需要一个名词,应该是sadness。

原:Although making money is a priority for most people, spending time with the family is equal significant.

改:…, spending time with the family is equally significant.

评:形容词significant前需要用副词来修饰,所以equal应该改成equally。

5、时态混乱

原:Although I have no work experience when I was a teenager, I always dreamed about having a job.

改:Although I had no work experience when I was a teenager, I always dreamed about having a job.

评:过去时的句子中冒出了现在时,同学你太粗心了,要仔细检查哦~

原:I would explain my view in the following paragraphs.

改:I’d like to explain… / I will explain…

评:可能是两种说法记混了吧,结果把时态搞错了……

6、主谓不一致

原:The way we deal with the environmental problems are crucial to the prosperity of human-being.

改:The way we deal with the environmental problems is crucial to the prosperity of human-being.

评:谓语之前有两个名词时,主谓搭配的问题就常常出现了。这里真正的主语应该是单数名词the way,所以与之搭配的谓语也应该是单数的is。

7、重复累赘

原:From my point of view, I think this argument is quite limited since many other ways can also help learning a foreign country.

改:From my point of view, this argument is quite limited since many other ways can also help us learn a foreign country.

评:from my point of view和I think重复啦,保留一个就好。当然这里建议留下更“高级”的from my point of view.

原:There are the majority of people who deem that they like to spend money on things which can bring them long memory.

改:Majority of the people like to spend money on things that can be memorized for long.

评:中文句式说的“有很多人……”,但别一看到“有”就非要用there be句型不可哦,直接摆出主谓宾就行了。

“things that can be memorized for long”,被动语态明显更地道。

托福写作解析:电影和电视的利弊

托福写作题目:

A/D Movies and televisions have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave.

30分作文也没有那么难做到啦。这是一篇近期考出30分写作的同学的考前习作。这个考试季很多同学反映写作压分,30分的作文单项分已经很罕见。我们一起看看,在这个季节,什么样的作文能稳稳拿下考场高分。

总结一下几个要点

1. 清晰有力的论证逻辑

2. 准确的用词

3. 句式的适当变化,如排比,虚拟,短句的偶尔出现。

4. 小错误多次出现可以容忍

托福写作满分作文:

Whenever I turn on TV, I see dark themes and plots of programs broadcast on it. Just calculate roughly, there are about 30 programs whose theme is pessimistic in every 40 programs. 【眼尖的同学一眼能看出来几处语法错误,显然ETS不那么介意;我们要学习的是作者用数字说明问题】And there are so many plots orienting adults that should not be seen by young people.【上面两个句子点出电视节目的两个问题,为论点的出现做充足铺垫】So I strongly believe that movies and televisions have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave. 【出论点,论点句要稳扎稳打,千万别此刻玩花的,花大了别人没看懂就麻烦了】This is not only because young people will imitate the inappropriate behavior in the programs, but also because the dark theme of them will distort the way young people view the world.【预告自己的两个分论点,老套的开头结构,胜在稳重清晰】

Firstly, young people may imitate the bad behavior they saw on televisions and movies.【同样,观点句不许玩花的,老实点儿】 Young people, especially children, are not sophisticated enough to think about the consequences【用词准确】 or their behavior carefully, and they are often eager to try new things 【解释论点句为什么成立--因为年轻人有这些特性】. Television programs and movies often include some violent behavior in them in order to make the plots more inviting【用词准确】 and attract more people to watch.【重申电视节目的特点,暴力镜头多,与上一句‘年轻人爱模仿’的信息合起来为下一句短句的力量制造必要条件】 So here is the problem【我们一再强调的短句的力量】. Young people will probably try those inappropriate【用词准确】 behaviors they saw on televisions, thinking they are normal or acceptable.【换个方式把论点句重新说了一遍,但并不让人觉得重复,因为顺承上文的逻辑推理而成立。全段没有一个例子,直接用纯论证完成,功力可见】

Secondly, lots of pessimistic themes of television programs or movies will make young people feel sad about the world. 【虽然主语长了一些,但作为论点句,依然是经典的主谓宾结构,简洁明了】As mentioned in the former paragraph, there are violence in TV programs and movies, and young people may not only imitate those bad behaviors, but also affected by the sad view in these programs.【借力上一段的内容,回点上段,增加文章内部的粘结力,但是在上一段所讨论信息的基础上向前推进一步,推出新论点,经典的承上启下结构】 Because they are during a period when their ways of looking at the world are formed, seeing too much about the dark side of the society is no good for their growth.【解释上一句为什么成立--因为年轻人世界观正在成形,应该用being formed 而不是are formed,但这种小错误不影响高分】It can create a false sense of reality【用词准确,来自平时的积累】, as if the only newsworthy events are those that are tragic or violent. They may form a bad habit of always looking at people or events from a dark point of view, feeling hopeless and despairing, even conducting some self-destructive behaviors.【这个列举的句子如果从sat语法的角度来说也是错误多多的……不过从语义上来说,做了一个因势利导夸大其词的论证推断,三个列举层层递进互为因果,还是实现了列举的修辞效果的】

Admittedly, there are some programs trying to convey optimistic view to viewers, but their plots are so unrealistic that they cannot convince young people. 【让步段第一句话,先提出自己之前的论证没有正视的情况,再明确指出这种情况的致命缺点】And they tell stories in a too exaggerating way, making stories more unconvincing. 【补刀】For example【全文都没有举例论证,到这里实在摒不住了,呵呵】, once I saw a TV program on the daily life of a couple. In order to convey【用词准确】 the view that ‘if you do good things, you will always get want you want’, the program told a story that the young man picks up 10000 dollars three times a week just because he always helps his neighbors and the god is touched by him! What a ridiculous story! If I were a child, I would have no desire to do good things, as I didn’t believe I would pick up so much money no matter how many good things I did.【这个虚拟语气的使用信手拈来,适合各种假设状况的探讨】 So even if there are some programs with optimistic themes, I don’t think they will impact young people more than those with pessimistic themes. 【总结这个例子对于自己论点的意义,再次强化自己的立场】



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